Comments on: GROUNDS CREW MORNING

By: Dana

Dana — Sun, 02 Aug 2009 15:23:31 +0000

Tag: You’re my queen. You, in turn, have to name seven queens.

http://mygorgeoussomewhere.org/2009/08/02/queens-of-all-things/

By: Dana

Dana — Sun, 02 Aug 2009 05:09:33 +0000

That last line is really sad. Wonderful and sad.

By: Dave Jarecki

Dave Jarecki — Fri, 31 Jul 2009 22:48:07 +0000

Thanks Angie – I like your alternative ending concept.

By: Dave Jarecki

Dave Jarecki — Fri, 31 Jul 2009 22:47:34 +0000

Thanks guatami.

By: gautami tripathy

gautami tripathy — Fri, 31 Jul 2009 15:20:47 +0000

I could feel the angst of that girl... don't forget to get my cigars

By: angie

angie — Fri, 31 Jul 2009 04:23:48 +0000

I really felt like I was eavesdropping on their conversation–great voice. Great concept, too.

I was surprised by the ending, though. I guess I’ve seen too many Japanese-derivative, B-horror movies because I was expecting the gravestone to belong to the little girl!

By: Nathan

Nathan — Fri, 31 Jul 2009 02:24:38 +0000

I love the diction and tone you get here. You really get a sense of the speaker in all kinds of ways.

By: christine swint

christine swint — Fri, 31 Jul 2009 02:16:23 +0000

I love the history of a cemetery, and the sorrow. I’m a sorrow junkie, as long as it’s not in real life. You wove a great narrative here. I totally get the grizzled gravedigger who lets his guard down when he sees the innocent girl.

By: Dave Jarecki

Dave Jarecki — Fri, 31 Jul 2009 00:42:09 +0000

Thanks Bobbie – I appreciate your thoughts and kind words. The poem feels blocked somehow. Not sure if I need more or less of the little girl in it.

By: Bobbie

Bobbie — Thu, 30 Jul 2009 23:49:37 +0000

That does hurt…very profound, yet sweet in your descriptions. I like the way you wrote this piece. ?